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Friday, 27 July 2018

My Holidays

WALT: Write a recount of one specific moment during my school holidays.
SUCCESS CRITERIA: I will have


  • A title
  • A orientation - Who, what, when, where, how, why
  • Fantastic language - time words, past tense, vivid verbs/vocabulary
  • Proofread/buddy checked my draft - punctuation, spelling and grammar.
  • A conclusion to wrap everything up.
  • A plan of the key points I will talk about.


My Plan: (10 mins)
In my holidays
Last Friday we had a disco at my house their were games lost of my friends came and cousins came to the disco we had a disco light and we had the tool lunch to four o clock, p:m the people Loucie,Shony,Leah,Me,my nan,Sister Tracey,Arkillies,Aalayis and Alezmah,Roxie    and next friday we whent to the beach and my cosins came Loucie,Shony,Leah,Me,my nan,Sister Tracey,Arkillies,Aalayis and Alezmah.



Start here:
My Holidays




Last Friday we had a disco at my house their were games lost of my friends came and cousins came to the disco we had a disco light and we had the tool lunch to 4:00, p:m the people Loucie, Shony, Leah, Me, my nan, Sister Tracey, Arkillies, Aalayis and Alezmah, Roxie and next Friday we went to the beach and my counis came Loucie, Shony, Leah ,Me, ( gran mama Leeane , Sister Tracey,  Arkillies, Aalayis and Alezmah we all went to Ngawha Springs we went in baby and my cosin was telling a dum story about a mans leg in the pool I didn’t believe him, because he’s a liar. After a few hours we got out then we went home and had a good sleep and got ready for school. THE END